Friday, August 9, 2013

Prosody: trust and feel


Aligned with nature-
becoming a child-
so trusting, secretive,
even – a wild,

eager to read
every leaf’s heart,
notice and follow
slope of the bud

cryptic deer will
meet you at path,
grass-hopper pop,
holding sword-grass…

nature confides:
straightened trees
paint  scenes
of heavenly reefs

nature confides:
heading a lira-
speed shifting world
could I voice clear…



Image credit: findicons.com

Submitted for d'Verse 'Prosody - Line and Meter'

19 comments:

  1. Very nicely crafted, Humbird. Nature has many lessons for us!

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    1. thanks, Mary for reading!glad you like my poem! :)

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  2. I love grasshopper pop holding sword grass...and eager to read every leaf's heart that's just lovely. Very nice!

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    1. thank you! love the cat on your site! :)

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  3. This reads so well, humbird. It kind of made me want to skip. And I love nature poetry. (and hummingbirds).

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    1. I'm so happy, Victoria! skipping with you! :)

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  4. This had a hippity hop rhythm due to the dimeter lines. It was very effective. The use of rhythm here added to the dimension and word choices of the poem itself. Nice. Thank you.

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  5. Great flow indeed as much takes seed and nature does abound, all around.

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  6. Love the reading of a leaf's heart, and the cryptic deer!

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    1. Glad you like it...I meet deer too often, and they're seem always waiting for me... :)

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  7. Good rhythm--a lovely summer's day read. Very nice.

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  8. ah, lovely...i like reading every leaf...and that nature shows those that do look....well done...i could not get the rhythm in mine so i bowed out...ack...

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    1. Thanks, Brian...we're writing how we're breathing...:)

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  9. nice..i like the little encounter with the deer... and the song-like rhythm...

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