You sent this song to me –
no words,
just ellipses…
Two rests between the chords
to breath
spontaneously
I hum upbeat motive
in heart
with caution
How thoughtful your advice
to use
percussion
Laptop’s keyboard – in smoke
from open
‘Offices’
Add music, words to rhythm -
affirm
self prophecy…
for Poetry Jam 'The Sound of Silence'
i hum an upbeat motive in heart with caution....probably a good way to approach life...not put the fire out on your keyboard before it catches...ha
ReplyDeleteHaving a little hum, and beating to ones own drum, way to be, as one steps back to see
ReplyDeleteLove the silence of two rests between chords!! ---- the ultimate of silences..
ReplyDeleteResting between the chords .. I love that line. Very nice!!
ReplyDeleteI love "affirm self-prophecy". How wonderful!
ReplyDeleteLovely... I can just hear laptop's keyboard.
ReplyDeleteThat first stanza really made me smile--the whole poem was very fun and well done:-)
ReplyDeleteI like this very much. I especially like the 2nd verse
ReplyDeleteGuess you just have to write your own song in life instead of waiting around for elipses and rests:)
ReplyDeletethe laptop's keyboard as a sort of percussion as a background for writing poetry...nice..i like
ReplyDeleteMusic is interesting...especially studying chords and 'eclipses' between notes are so intriguing. I just loved the first part of this poem so much! :)
ReplyDeleteI read this as a description of the writing process. And I loved it!
ReplyDeletewell done indeed....thanks for sharing
ReplyDelete"I hum upbeat motive in heart with caution" --- ah, how delicate... loved the entire flow of your piece... smiles...
ReplyDeleteI never thought of the rest as being silence. But that is exactly what they are. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteNotes and words add to the silence of the soul, very interesting and a great take on the theme.
ReplyDeletea song with no words... just music. Nice.
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