Sunday, September 8, 2013

The answer


So intricate way of drifting
at central avenue dreams
in scattered magic dimension
a buffoon used to intrigued me in

Above the jelly clouds
in cranberry only stains
below the vigilant bell roulade
pays off your choice to change



The Sunday Whirl


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25 comments:

  1. There's something very e e cummings about this piece. Intriguing!

    Six-Word Whirl

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  2. Thanks, the words and picture contribute each other well, giving inspiration!

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  3. really intriguing dance in this...surreal around the edges and what an ominous ending...

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  4. What an amazing combination of challenges!

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  5. ... beyond my ability to understand this... but I found myself sitting here trying to solve the puzzle... Are you willing to give a hint of what this means? I know some poets HATE to do that, so if not, that is OK.

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    1. ...just imagine the picture like that, may be you see it in the circus..hypnotist put you in the trance, first you are between two chairs for example, and then where chairs removed you are in the air...just sweetly drifting...in the dreams....but of course I had my some personal imagination details...and also I was need to use all those words...fun! sorry if I made you frustrating....is this not part of writing poems? :) Thanks for asking, Margaret

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    2. It helps. Those words are a daunting list. Thanks!

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  6. This has a lovely rhyme and rhythm to it. I love the images of "jelly clouds" and "craberry stains." The abstractness of your poem fits the abstract image so well. Thanks for participating!

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  7. Nice rhythm and images. This is strangely playful. I like, I like!

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    1. Thank you, Brenda for interesting words!

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  8. I like the same parts that LM mentioned and the abstractness of your response as well...great write.

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  9. buffoon was a nice touch, enjoyed it much

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  10. I agree this is very intriguing and leaves the reader wanting to know more.

    Pamela

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  11. The ink blot looks like a bat to me--a Fleidermaus!
    Somehow I think of Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds when I read this one. It's whimsical in a similar way.

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  12. I like the jelly clouds and cranberry stains too!

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  13. The painting has a devilish duplicity about it, I am glad you were not fooled.

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  14. I loved it-I am a huge fan of jelly clouds. YOU made me
    smile! My daughter and I love Bridge mix candy and fight
    over the Jellies! So, this reminded me of her~

    I too thought of Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds!

    Fun, to read :D

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  15. Loved it--the buffoon gave it a fabulous touch! Aha...love 'jelly clouds and cranberry stains' too!:))

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  16. Thanks for reading and thoughtful comments!

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  17. Change is a choice and in that there is hope. An intriguing piece!

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  18. My first thought was of a crush, or a new relationship - one where you almost can't breathe for want of being near the person who has captured your heart. But then any poem can be interpreted as many ways as there are readers :)

    Thank you for your visit to the ongoing Wordle story 'The Best Laid Schemes' over at my WP site. I used to post them here too, but Blogspot started giving me grief with my attempt to put too much on one page. WP did to that's partly why Chapter 5 is on it's own page. ~JulesPaige (Jules)

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