Sunday, December 29, 2013

Nights

                          selfie

When I crossed
the territory
of the reveries,
a redemption
the naughty/ nights / knocked
to persuade/ upgrade
the extension…

Gloomy, they left
with no guess/ a clue / the keys, -
nobody fell for
the false / flickering / treat or tricks.


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16 comments:

  1. Nobody fell for it and gave in, what a sin lol

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  2. Awesome take! We all probably named our poems Selfie! Lol!

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  3. Interesting take on the prompt..distorted picture creates some mystery..

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  4. I think I am the only one who didn't look far enough to know it was a selfie. Now that I think of it, though, my poem could be a capture of a universal selfie.

    I enjoy the final line... the flickering trick or treats creates such a vivid image-picture.

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  5. the first three lines made me think of a bird crossing over, for some reason. (Maybe it's your nom de plume.) the second stanza is quite the twist ~

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  6. Definitely a creative poem, thank you very much. Happy 2014! Leovi.

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  7. BAH! I never even thought of selfie! I saw something totally different! This is a good one!

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  8. I like what you did with the image. For some reason the line "naughty/nights/knocked" makes me think of Monty Python. Interesting form with the use of "/".

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  9. Well done & I love your adaption of the picture too!

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  10. I like the feel of Halloween here...

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  11. the best would be if we ourselves did not fall for our own treets and tricks...and masks....

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  12. Thanks to All! Enjoyed your comments! Happy 2014 year!

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  13. ... I fell for your poem! Great write, love the image.

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