Sunday, December 29, 2013

Nights

                          selfie

 When I crossed
the territory
of the reveries,
a redemption
the naughty/ nights / knocked
to persuade/ upgrade
the extension…

Gloomy, they left
with no guess/ a clue / the keys, -
nobody fell for
the false / flickering / treat or tricks.


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16 comments:

  1. Pat HattDecember 29, 2013 at 10:24 AM

    Nobody fell for it and gave in, what a sin lol

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  2. Bekkie SanchezDecember 29, 2013 at 11:57 AM

    Awesome take! We all probably named our poems Selfie! Lol!

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  3. TruedessaDecember 29, 2013 at 12:43 PM

    Interesting take on the prompt..distorted picture creates some mystery..

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  4. Julie Jordan ScottDecember 29, 2013 at 12:54 PM

    I think I am the only one who didn't look far enough to know it was a selfie. Now that I think of it, though, my poem could be a capture of a universal selfie.

    I enjoy the final line... the flickering trick or treats creates such a vivid image-picture.

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  5. AnonymousDecember 29, 2013 at 2:59 PM

    the first three lines made me think of a bird crossing over, for some reason. (Maybe it's your nom de plume.) the second stanza is quite the twist ~

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  6. LeoviDecember 29, 2013 at 3:57 PM

    Definitely a creative poem, thank you very much. Happy 2014! Leovi.

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  7. Kathe W.December 29, 2013 at 4:08 PM

    BAH! I never even thought of selfie! I saw something totally different! This is a good one!

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  8. Other MaryDecember 29, 2013 at 4:35 PM

    I like what you did with the image. For some reason the line "naughty/nights/knocked" makes me think of Monty Python. Interesting form with the use of "/".

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  9. Anthony DuceDecember 29, 2013 at 8:09 PM

    Enjoyed very much..

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  10. KatherineDecember 30, 2013 at 1:00 AM

    Well done & I love your adaption of the picture too!

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  11. Tess KincaidDecember 30, 2013 at 3:03 PM

    I like the feel of Halloween here...

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  12. Brian MillerDecember 30, 2013 at 4:06 PM

    the best would be if we ourselves did not fall for our own treets and tricks...and masks....

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  13. humbirdDecember 30, 2013 at 4:21 PM

    Thanks to All! Enjoyed your comments! Happy 2014 year!

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  14. HelenDecember 31, 2013 at 12:34 PM

    ... I fell for your poem! Great write, love the image.

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