Sunday, May 11, 2014

Close

 Martin Stranka photos
'Close' ~ Martin Stranka

She rubs the shattering dreams
thru the glasses of clumsy clown
falling from shimmering sky
leaves no chance for salvation…

The sigh…longing soul insight…
as if swinging medieval axe
brings the power to travel
back into time…

Vanished smoothly…
to settle for less
on the land of indigenous people…
listen! someone calling your name…

                        Brenda Warren 

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55 comments:

  1. This flowed so smoothly! Beautiful! (PS. possible typo in the first line shuttering)

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    1. Oh, thanks much! ~ Happy Sunday :)xx

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  2. This verse sounded very nice indeed, really good use of words there

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    1. Thank you very much! Lovely Day to you :)xx

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  3. Hopefully it doesn't take a big axe to travel back in time, that would hurt lol

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    1. well... something we need 'cut' to move on...and our 'axe'/efforts might be big or small...

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  4. it's tough when dreams shatter... but maybe there's a new dream just around the next bend...

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    1. Hopefully, the dreams like a puzzle pieces can be rebuilt again in new combination...thanks :)

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  5. Lovely mix of present and past through your imagery.

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    1. Thank you, Brenda! For the comment and inspirational words!

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  6. A shattered dream is so much like falling.. I love how you mixed the prompts.. I reads so well

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  7. Shattered dreams are hard to experience. Yet, the closing line makes me think something new might be beginning.

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  8. Some cool imagery in this poem - the shattered dreams, the shimmering sky.....

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  9. enjoyed the image and the accompanying piece.
    ZQ

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  10. A time travelling Alice maybe? Although more like a warrior..I like that we don't quite know..makes her more likely to be amongst us now!

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    1. Yeah, we don't quite know...have to trust our heart...what makes the ego run crazy....~ Thank you!

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  11. This has a nice flow. I like the time travel angle.

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    1. We grip for past very badly sometimes... Thanks!

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  12. The prompt inspires a time travel theme. Nicely written

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    1. Time travel - not anymore fiction...almost! Thank you!

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  13. Nice images in this, good write

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  14. How much more cognizant we are now to treading on ancient land. I like to be alone in the wild and have it whispering to me.

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    1. It's hard to be humble sometimes....we focus more on new desires and forget to appreciate what we have ~ Thanks, Oldegg!

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  15. whew...there is an interesting intensity to this...the last bit grounds it for me but i like the grit in the first 2 stanzas....

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    1. It feels like we are connected, when meet the reflection of ourselves, - or just feels like part of us, if it makes sense. Hugs.

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  16. love this smooth flow...it's beautifully done

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  17. Love that though there is a shattering of dreams, it ends on an optimistic note...with "someone calling your name."

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    1. Yeah, the hope - we came here to serve others to enlighten our souls....~ Thank you, Mary!

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  18. I like that power to travel back in time ~ Such an interesting response to the picture prompt ~ Take care & have a good week ~

    Grace

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    1. Thanks, Grace! Peaceful week for you :)xx

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  19. Ah a Magician- Fool lurking in background ...have you seen " the time travellers wife"?

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  20. A photographer? Sure, now will check it. Thanks, K.

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  21. It made me think of women sent to the New World to serve some kind of punishment... The pain of being thrown into the air, into the control chaos created by another. I wonder if she'll ever hear anyone calling her name...

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    1. P.S. Thanks so much for sharing the photographer's into. I love his work!

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    2. We all walk through dif challenges in life...running from people we find salvation in people again...~ Thanks!

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  22. It is a pity! It has to come to some sort of finality. But the pain lingers on! Wonderful write for the multiple prompts, humbird!

    Hank

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    1. The pain also has a positive side - the pleasure..~ Thanks, Hank!

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  23. everything happened for good,happening for good, will happen for good..time calling you back at the same time giving hope!! amazing lines that ends with optimistic belief...smiles:)

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    1. It's amazing how is everything happening in their own time...~ Thanks for joining my blog :)xx

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  24. Shattered is a word that always sparks strong images, and as always, you layout a perfect vivid story, that uses the words you've been given and you transform a perfect magpie as well. Bravo.

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    1. Thank you, Karen for kind words! :)xx

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  25. I like the unexpected medieval axe...

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  26. nice flow and well done incorporating the two prompts..

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