Saturday, July 27, 2013

Deeds

Words
Read? No
I bask in
burning feeling
bitter taste of life
this summer seems at town
for little while with reason
like poltergeist reminds of deeds
we chose, but left undone for late
new day arrives not recognizing me…
Image credit: motorcycless.com

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18 comments:

  1. hedgewitchJuly 27, 2013 at 5:46 PM

    Nice twist at the end. Thanks so much for sharing with us.

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  2. FireblossomJuly 27, 2013 at 6:23 PM

    I don't know what this says.

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    1. humbirdJuly 29, 2013 at 6:16 PM

      Just a little our/ ego can explain how/ the words come up/ on the white field - jump/ ~ thanks for reading :)

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  3. UnknownJuly 27, 2013 at 6:52 PM

    poltergeist reminds of deeds we chose ... yup!

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  4. GraceJuly 27, 2013 at 7:36 PM

    I like the twist in the ending ~

    Have a good weekend ~

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  5. Pat HattJuly 27, 2013 at 7:44 PM

    those deeds can sure sprout their own seeds

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  6. HannahJuly 27, 2013 at 9:18 PM

    Reminds me of the way night can be a dark place for peeps in more way than one...good job with the form!

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  7. jane heweyJuly 27, 2013 at 9:19 PM

    your poem and the image are matched wonderfully. quite a twisty-turny read, keeping my thoughts astute.

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  8. Gemma WisemanJuly 28, 2013 at 2:21 AM

    Love the personified day in the last line. Adds a very personal, wounding turn to the chain of events.

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  9. Kalyan PanjaJuly 28, 2013 at 7:06 AM

    beautiful words....lovely lines!!

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  10. Brian MillerJuly 28, 2013 at 7:23 AM

    i hear you...each season has its ghosts that linger, an aftertaste...the last line is really nice and to me has an edge, when the day does not recognize you

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  11. Kerry O'ConnorJuly 28, 2013 at 10:54 AM

    What an excellent poetic thought you have captured here: a day that does not recognize the one to live through it.

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  12. HelenJuly 28, 2013 at 11:04 AM

    Somber ending to day's end ....

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  13. Other MaryJuly 28, 2013 at 6:11 PM

    Oh, that last line is gold! Cool!

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  14. Susie ClevengerJuly 29, 2013 at 12:14 AM

    That final line is powerful...to greet a day that doesn't even recognize you..

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  15. TCPCJuly 29, 2013 at 12:31 AM

    The closing lines are an icing!

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  16. LaTonya BaldwinJuly 29, 2013 at 7:54 AM

    hate to repeat but that last line....

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