Sunday, August 17, 2014

Grand



What demimonde
has the right
to judge
with candle on or off
the way I peel
the rind of oranges
as transgression of rites?

Despite the abomination
of isolation
I keep the allegiance
to the asylum
Gray
I see myself
reborn
in Africa.


by Brenda Warren

Read more at: Sunday Whirl

Shared with PU Poetry Pantry

25 comments:

  1. Nicely done, reminds me of tumbling waterfall.

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  2. Not too many would want to pledge their allegiance to an asylum, but there are those odd few out there!

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  3. Peel how we like, the rest can take a hike

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  4. We should always be able to choose how we eat our oranges - that is part of who we are xo

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  5. The compactness of the first stanza is stunning.. Love the images you create there..

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  6. You always handle your assignment with flare. However..."What demimonde
    has the right to judge," I felt What demimonde has the right
    to "be"judge?
    :-)
    ZQ

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  7. I really like the idea of rebirth in Africa, as (after all) Africa is the cradle of civilization! Smiles.

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  8. Yes, society has a tendency to dictate how we should live down to the smallest details, even the way we should peel oranges. Fortunately we have a right to refuse to conform.

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  9. Interesting insights into us all. thought provoking poem

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  10. I too love the first stanza--wonderful images!!

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  11. Oh I love this poem, love the humor in it too

    http://thequietone.net/2014/08/16/wordle-174-the-penny-dreadful-edition/

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  12. wonderful pairing of words. I had to chuckle at the transgression of not pealing fruit correctly - bravo!!!

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  13. Soon someone will say "Why aren't you eating the peel of oranges?" Well we do in marmalade so for all the know it alls "Butt out!"

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  14. Oh I love those closing lines. I hope I am reborn in Africa, wont make it this lifetime.

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  15. Ha...this is hilarious...creative and imaginative...loved it !

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  16. lovely imagery .. very imaginative indeed.

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  17. Thank you, friends! Your comments made my day! Gratitude :)xx

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  18. i am all for freedom to eat fruit
    no matter how you want...ha....smiles.

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  19. They'll be telling us to peel bananas next! A delightful poem.

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  20. Wow, nice how you used the words in this piece.

    Pamela

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  21. The Sunday Whirl seems to have disappeared but thanks to its Facebook page I’ve found this weeks’ words. As a temporary measure I’ve put them up on my site along with a Mister Linky thingy-dingy should you wish to participate. It’s all at
    http://www.keithsramblings.blogspot.co.uk/2014/08/once-upon-happier-time.html

    Spread the word brothers and sisters!

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    1. Oh, nice! Thanks, Keith! See you soon :)

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