Friday, January 30, 2015

Currents within

 Photo by Artur Siegel
photo by Artur Siegel



She hears ‘snap’
in her neck, and spine
clicks free, not in shots anymore;
the  healing hands helped, calmed the pain till
tomorrow.

Run in circle
feeling as victim-
patterns of negative talk,
a fear of future while – talented
an artist.

The ropes torn
when stretched skin cracks.
Craft required sacrifice,
the payoff unlocking shapes & hints
of true love.




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19 comments:

  1. this made me sad, but if she could sculpt love - then it has a happy ending - nice

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    1. In third stanza - a quiz for me too...thanks for idea to sculpt love....

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  2. True love is a worthy payoff!

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    1. finding the true love in meaning of the purpose - real journey...Thank you, Mary!

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  3. Somehow the true love comes through pain.. maybe it has to be so, at least we value the love more that way.

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  4. nice...I like the last one...its a bit of a riddle to me...
    the first one, my wife used to work for a chiropractor, so I am def familiar...smiles.

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  5. I like all of these: that second one is especially poignant; so many artists (of all kinds) make themselves into victims by being harsh on themselves instead of celebrating their talent. It's something I need to work on ...

    Tony

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  6. "craft required sacrifice" - a great line to show that no good thing comes without sweat,pain,tears...

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  7. Yes, these internal currents can make all the difference.

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  8. The pain makes us appreciate everything more

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  9. It takes that sudden inspiration and there comes the masterpiece. That is very true humbird! Great lines!

    Hank

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  10. The first poem reminded me of a visit to the osteopathic physician.

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  11. Such sacrifices do hurt. Unlike others, I don't know if it is worth it. The most evocative is truly the third one. You made us think.
    Beautifully penned. :-)
    -HA

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  12. i'm glad that the healing hands helped...it can be so painful and usually it's one half physical and one half from the things we carry around with us

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  13. Let me pause for a minute to thank you for the video. I sent it to a friend.

    I love how this form lends itself to these stoplight thoughts and solutions. I am so good at the inner monologue. This poem is brilliant. Give me the helping hands, knowledge of creativity, true love ... excellent!

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    1. Thank you, dear Susan! Glad this poem/video helped you! Love x

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  14. Dealing with an aging body, where I went initially.. the victim of an overpowering massage, and then the end… So I enjoyed most the true love in the end..

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