Wednesday, November 12, 2014

Shadow sonnet

Alice in Wonderland, Chapter 2, Illustration by John Tenniel


Swimmers of the life; we all are swimmers
Short or long – we give it distant shot
Yearning for the best we better learning
Quote the wisdom we get rated by Klout.

Brave, we ford malignant spots in rave
Catalyst the waters served as catalysts
Surreal mission makes our lives surreal
List the issues, be aware at least.

Swimmers of the life, we dance a shimmy
Ebbs are tracing odds, colliding abs
Crucial in order to save the crew shell
Not to lose yourself in final note.

And giving spark to spoofed end
Hand’s reaching for another hand.


Read more at: PU Mid-Week Motif: Swimming 

Three Word Wednesday: Crucial, Malignant, Yearning

Creative Blooming: Shadow Sonnet


26 comments:

  1. Lovely visions seen by your verging lines. I especially like, "Swimmers of the life, we dance a shimmy, Ebbs are tracing odds."

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    1. Some interesting influence here, Karen... Thanks!

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  2. i agree, we all swimming in a pool called life. our pools may be different from each other though but all had the same obstacles.

    have a good day :)

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  3. The tide of opinion is hard to swim against but thank heavens for those that are strong enough to do so. It is the final waterfall that worries me.

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    1. I believe it'll be fine if you stay in good company of soulmates...x

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  4. A sonnet, how wonderful, Irene! Nice response to the prompt.

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  5. "Yearning for the best we better learning" Swimming in Life. I enjoy the begnning and ending associations/ sound echoes. Is there a word for this kind of word play?

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    1. Shadow words? homophonic words. ~ Thank you, Susan for inspiration!

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  6. Have to keep kicking and searching for that shore as we swim away every day

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    1. Every day - right!
      Thanks for insight. :)

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  7. a very philosophical sonnet and quite true.

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  8. unique vocabulary juxtaposition -keeps one swimming till the end

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  9. And giving spark to spoofed end
    Hand’s reaching for another hand

    What a lovely verse with so much feel attached to it...Loved it

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  10. wow...love those word plays..fantastic...

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  11. Fantastic take, humbird!! "Surreal mission makes our lives surreal
    List the issues, be aware at least."- Great message indeed!! There is so much life quivering under cover ...Wow! Loved this sonnet! :)

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  12. Thank you so much, my friends, for reading and commenting! xx

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  13. Enjoyed.. Swimming is a constant in all of this we continue to approach..

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  14. Well expressed. Lets keep going up stream.

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  15. The trick I think is to keep swimming - nicely put in your poem!

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  16. Wonderful advice! Thank you! Happy weekend to all :)x

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