Sunday, May 18, 2014

The moment

Edward Hopper, 1922 


…drunk air…
a chaos of vibes,
the hands draw
the graphics
of true and false
(aka a Polygraph test)

from the altitude
of disaster
I force myself
to chew the bread…

You – pale
alabaster like,
shivering,
plastic plant
leans forward,
balancing
on the edge,
holding breath…

…exhale…
why
unnoticed
any people
would pass by…

mine…
only moment.

Brenda Warren


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24 comments:

  1. oh my- this has so much tension...well done!

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  2. Like the polygraph test, can fool the one of life only to an extent

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  3. that whole section on the polygraph test///true or false and forcing yourself to chew the bread...i really like how it plays together...

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  4. This has the feel of a smokey intimate moment treasured and savoured..delicious!

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  5. Really a very special moment!

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  6. I love how you have used the words.. and that moment of alabaster whiteness.. terrifying. (and I assume the Polygraph test was not passed)

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  7. Eating forced bread will not end well.

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  8. Nice arrangement of words...gee cannot be a good feeling to eat forced bread..

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  9. I read the bread chewing as necessary to avoid spitting venom at this stage. Her explosion is yet to come...it may not be a pretty sight! Her stance reveals a lot. Very well interpreted!

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  10. Love the opening: "drunk air…a chaos of vibes"

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  11. All in a world of their own. Wonderful write humbird!

    Hank

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  12. Very cleverly written .. very good

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  13. world is too cluttered these days

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  14. I like the ominous plastic plant...

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  15. Excellent use of the words, humbird.

    Pamela

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  16. Love it

    http://thequietone.net/2014/05/18/new-poem-for-sunday-2/

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  17. I like the chaos of vibes! It's everywhere you look. It's all around us!

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  18. I like it when the wordle and a painting come together.

    (I think I just found a comment you had posted that ended up in spam - but I was in a rush to accept it that I forgot which piece it was for... sorry. I shall try to better attend my long verse sites folders.) Thanks, Jules

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  19. I like this concept of disaster at altitude, as though one of Dantes circle may be in the realm of corrupted sky- god ...perhaps the missing eighth ?

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  20. Thanks for the thoughtful comments! 'Disaster' is what we may feel sometimes, when loosing control...

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  21. "Force myself to chew the bread". What is it about oncoming disaster that makes eating such hard work? Brilliantly observed!

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    1. Thanks for joining my blog! xx Love your story.

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