Wednesday, November 19, 2014

Abstract concrete motif

'Rapture with music' by Gholam Yunessi


At first
healthy
notorious motif
serving better
our toxic and fiery
purpose

turning tables,
ambiguous chairs,
letting stage be
our home,

we’re forging the reason,
emulated precarious
puzzles,
piano pauses,
words
accusing
the weight
over lurking pensive
floor lamps,
highlighted the
blooming Bonsai,
blurry painting
aligned with nodding
Hawaiian turtles. 







21 comments:

  1. the hawaiian turtles there in the close made me smile... also love the lurking pensive
    floor lamps...what an image... smiles

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  2. I love forging the reasons, don't you? Better yet, turtles.

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  3. This was a wonderful exercise - a lesson in lateral thinking, I think.

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  4. Amazing amalgamation of all the things!!

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  5. turning tables ..ambiguous chairs...like that!

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  6. What a lovely demonstration of word abstraction that fits together perfectly!

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  7. Gosh, great poem ambiguous chairs gives me such a thought, but best of all is your charming spring to life shell work!

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  8. each line is a sketch...wonderful..

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  9. each line is a sketch...wonderful..

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  10. haha anything can be better with Hawaiian turtles

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  11. Enjoyed. Had feeling of being enclosed within a well known room, long enough to know the shared objects a little too long.

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  12. Familiar surroundings, your home; well done.

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  13. The words you chose gives this piece a heavy, oppressive feel that the last line lightens. Very nice.

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  14. Well, I LOVE those nodding turtles at the end! Big smiles. Intriguing word usage in the second stanza...the precarious puzzles and piano pauses.

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  15. definitely intriguing. an abstract turned clear at the end

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  16. This was fun to read. i like the pictures it conjured in my mind.

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  17. How satisfying to have abstract painting and poetry knit so well.

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  18. that was fun to read it made me smile.

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  19. Great poem, I enjoyed the feel of it.

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  20. A very uplifting poem, with a hint of music in the background!!!

    Eileen

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