Saturday, October 11, 2014

Eyeful



Pack brains in trains
torture not the flesh
worn liquor uniform
lust lasts under
hypnosis

hypnotizing gimmicks
slash-smash
with lotion,
tease low emotion of
body machine

truth seen by discerning eye.



Sunday Whirl 182


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14 comments:

  1. I smiled at the idea that lust lasts under hypnosis. Perhaps this should inspire a scientific study.

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  2. ENjoyed. The last sentence says it all..

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  3. sometimes we have to see things not meant to be seen!!!

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  4. Dig deeper and the eye shall see

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  5. Nice assemblage of those tricky words!

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  6. Nice, the way you used the words!

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  7. liquor, lust...they all can be distractions
    a discerning eye can see through....

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  8. You must certainly pull past the layers to find the truth these days...and I think you just did!

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  9. Interesting poem, with its sharp images. Love the lust line, that just perfect. Thanks for posting that music video, will check out later.

    This is a good song too It;s Mystical Sun Cloudbursting http://youtu.be/wQRtEPHsvE0

    http://thequietone.net/2014/10/11/phantom-train/

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  10. Having been smashed by liquor I don't that discernability 'hic" was one of my strong points.

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  11. I agree an interesting poem with stark images. Your opening line grabs the reader immmediately. Nice job.

    Pamela

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    1. *that should read: grabs the reader's attention immediately.

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  12. "truth seen by discerning eye" lovely ending to a lovely poem...nicely done.

    http://whenthepenbleeds.blogspot.ca/?zx=d36f092f50b54848

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