Sunday, October 19, 2014

Mapping

Mag_242 ~ courtesy of Tess Kincaid


We steel to shine
as diamonds? – crazy
martyrs of self-dreams
we seer our victories
in argument for sake of it…

Such prisoners of childhood
at twilight
play secrets with a shadow,
pretending we can’t hear
a stranger/soul’s
laughter…


Sunday Whirl

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22 comments:

  1. So well used those words.. and it works so well with the picture too.

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  2. love the 'line play secrets with shadow'....xx

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  3. I think it is beautiful when we take times to listen for a stranger's laughter!

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  4. lovely poem- I am enjoying what we all are writing this week!

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  5. I specially like play secrets with shadow ~ Good work on the weaving of words ~

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  6. A strangers laughter just means you are having fun and doing something right, hopefully

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  7. Excellent use of the words, humbird. I love laughter.

    Pamela

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  8. i like this contempt for "martyrs of self-dreams" and they are truly ".... prisoners of childhood / at twilight"...use of words is amazing here...

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  9. some really great lines in this...the martyrs of self dreams...
    that whole second stanza is rather enrapturing...

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  10. The enemy always attacks at dusk - Sun Tzu

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  11. Secrets and shadows, nice write!

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  12. Stolen shine is never as pure as a diamond sparkle..the picture really illuminates the bigger story behind this piece

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  13. " …at twilight,
    play secrets with a shadow," really like the imagery with that line. Reminds me of my own childhood, playing till dusk, till our parents called us in. Well written, great combination of imagery and words.

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  14. Great use of the prompt. I like "playing secrets with a shadow"

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  15. Interesting because maybe the strangers laughter isn't that innocent

    http://thequietone.net/2014/10/19/crazy-diamond/

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    1. Good idea. Cool words, Cathy, thank you! :)x

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  16. We're all prisoners of our childhood...excellent...

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