Friday, October 3, 2014

An ideal + 7

photo-design by Jody Schmidt 


You think...
if only everything
could happened
like in your drift:
the right kiln
on the right tinsel
open all the dotted lines,
and on the other sign
your worth of
accepted rumps
and roars
for happy… lima bean
would you be satisfied then?
for how long?
guess..
until you catch
the magpie
new spawn
at the correlation
of your extraterrestrials...


Note: my original poem An ideal

Read more at: d'Verse  

12 comments:

  1. the right kiln
    on the right tinsel and opening all dotted lines...ha...cool...and love the extraterrestrials there in the close as well..smiles

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  2. I like the thought of opening all the dotted lines, and I'd be apt to hide a few lima beans for sure! Interesting thoughts.... new and refreshing!

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  3. Hee! I know I'd be satisfied with rumps and lima beans...if there was nothing else. Very fun how this turned out.

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  4. Hopefully no probers catch me lol

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  5. Loved- " new spawn
    at the correlation
    of your extraterrestrials..."

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  6. I enjoyed 'until you catch the magpie.' That made me smile.

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  7. Hmm...The ending made me smile. There were definitely some nice combinations.

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  8. The scolding is sort of justified, so very well exercised.. Totally enjoyed..

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  9. This is surreal and creative response humbird ~ Maybe an out of body experience, smiles ~

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  10. This worked - it created a different meaning within its construct as it melted the known reality and set about new meanings. Super cool!

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  11. some cool expressions here Humbird especially the last five lines :)

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  12. will we ever be satisfied....? i doubt it...
    and funny i think i can actually translate your verse
    back to the original...smiles.

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