Saturday, March 15, 2014

Sonata

New dawn. New day. New entry chance.
When dreams embrace the heads so tight
It's hard to see what - wrong, what – right.

Sun climbs up high to watch balance
Contrast between the sky and earth,
And humans stretching in the pause.

Hark, wind, mischievous child at glance
Inflates the clouds like balloons
The heaven hear cry of loons.

When whistling – makes the clouds dance
Migrating, they attract the bird
Who fly away to verge of world.

Wind drives the pensive tree in trance
Disheveled, for the smugly eye
Sun never be the same in sky.
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New dawn. New day. New entry chance.
Sun climbs up high to watch balance
Hark, wind, mischievous child at glance
When whistling – makes the clouds dance
Wind drives the pensive tree in trance.


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27 comments:

  1. The form has been put to excellent use in your lyrical poem, Humbird. This was a delightful portrait of a windy, sunny day. I especially love the idea that the sun is different every day.

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    1. Thank you, Kerry for challenge! for high score :) Nothing is absolute....

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  2. Ah.. Those days when the wind hunt the clouds through the sky like balloons.. So much of spring in your poem...

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    1. Longing for spring, for new...~ Thank you! :)x

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  3. Wasn't this a puzzle!
    Well done. Love the word disheveled in here.

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    1. Yes, indeed! Love puzzles! Thanks!

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  4. New dawn. New day. New entry chance.
    Sun climbs up high to watch balance

    There's so much to look forward to in a new day. Nicely humbird!

    Hank

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    1. It's good to walk with open eyes! - Thanks

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  5. true on each day being a new chance....glad that was the refrain as it centers the rest...i like all the connections you draw in the middle as well...as i def believe we are interconnected...

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    1. Yes, you - astute eye- connection and interconnection - the way to live. ~ Thanks!

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  6. I like the new day, new dawn, so much promise in your lines ~ Well done humbird ~

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  7. new dawn new day more fun on the way

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  8. love the sun in different mood..and the lovely images portrayed here...yes a new day definitely opens up a new chance...

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    1. The sun - the main character here...so it has to be changing follow the law of the music form: sonata. ~ Thanks :)x

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  9. Love! The dreams embracing, humans stretching, child inflating, clouds migrating ...everything is awake and lively.

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    1. Love actions...and conflicts with resolutions...~ Thanks :)x

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  10. Absolutely love the 'disheveled for the smugly eye'. I'm struggling with this challenge, haven't been able to get any words on paper yet.

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    1. Hi Kathryn, I always get inspired by photos, art. What the favorite characters of your photos...make them talk to each other...just one idea ~ Thanks for feedback. :)x

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  11. Love thinking about a new dawn!!

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    1. We are creators of tomorrow. Why not? :)x

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  12. Amazing....love it!
    "Wind drives the pensive tree in trance
    Disheveled, for the smugly eye
    Sun never be the same in sky."

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