'Necklace of Pearls' by Elisabetta Trevisan
When my eyes
grow big,
filled with
water,
I flick/flip
the feet
the feet
into flow.
I see
the bottom
of creek,
lifeless pool,
impacted
by storm –
the pearls,
scents of
unknown
remote
scenes.
I follow
golden tale
on haunting
quest
along
the litter
of twisting
plants
to illuminate,
scrutinize
the ancient
path,
the price
have been
paid
for
abandoning
water
once…
by Brenda Warren
Read more at: Imaginary Garden with Real Toads: Sunday Feature Artist: Elisabetta Trevisan,
Sunday Whirl
What I most appreciate about this write is your use of sound qualities - the alliteration creates a soothing mood and adds to the mysticism of your theme.
ReplyDeleteyou create a cool underwater atmosphere... the paid price... and water some say will soon be more valuable than oil..
ReplyDeletePearls in that depth that we have lost or abandoned in our rise up and out and away from the old water ...thanks for offering this diver who takes us back.
ReplyDeleteI like the premise of the story ~ finding that ancient path once abandoned & the price paid for ~ Thanks for linking up with Real Toads Sunday Challenge ~ Happy Sunday ~
ReplyDeletethe lake and all it contains in its depths. Nicely done
ReplyDeleteI love how you use / the flick/flip..and the rhythm like feet swimming through water on this quest
ReplyDeleteFinding what is below brings on quite the flow
ReplyDeleteThe flow of words is captivating.
ReplyDeletethe pic poem and word cloud work together well
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your haunting quest Hum, the form flows like ocean tides.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! Your comments are so inspiring! Much Love to all :)xx
ReplyDeleteyou create some cool mystery at the bottom of that river...the old ways...the old things...kinda like diving and finding what once was lost...
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed.. Took me into a wonderful liquid place.
ReplyDeleteInteresting poem. At first I thought her eyes were filled with tears, but then I was taken to her underwater world. Lovely write.
ReplyDeletethe price
ReplyDeletehave been
paid
for
abandoning
water
once…
That caught my attention and made me want more of this story.
How delightful. I am sure others would like to know the history and any sequel to your captivating piece of fiction.
ReplyDeleteAh! the quest of a mermaid.
ReplyDeleteAn amazing work to cover two prompts. My hat is off to you.
ReplyDeleteK
from one world to another... back and forth... it's never the same as before... love the world underneath you describe....
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