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Under blanket of storm
as an indolent voyager,
droplets mentoring tone,
"Marseillaise”, not a blues, -
it’s a fall, no burlesque -
ah, you right, -
I described it earlier:
introductory lesson of
bravery,
haiku assertive,
discernment of life…
Mauvais tone of me moaning
at full moon liberation,
dance routine in plie -
language fails to support,
sailing ancient site
I rewrite consequences...
sudden visit of angel,
knight of sword, ace of wands…
A history observed in awe.. Excellent suggested imagery. Enjoyed
ReplyDeleteToo bad we all can't get a rewrite some times
ReplyDelete...take me away my sweet...
ReplyDeletethat I too might sleep...
Wonderful title/opening line to a nuanced, thoughtful piece.
ReplyDeleteI especially like your closing lines!
ReplyDeletethank you for sharing, this is ingenious
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Breathtaking work, Humbird!
ReplyDeletesometimes feelings are beyond language....love the sense of wonderment here...
ReplyDeletehaiku as adjective... yes very good.
ReplyDeleteI rewrite consequences...
ReplyDeletesudden visit of angel,
knight of sword, ace of wands…
Life can expect to change directions for the better. We are there to be the puppet master planning the moves!
Hank
This is beautiful!!! 💖
ReplyDeleteThis is now one of my favorites that you have written. Photo and words leaves me spellbound
ReplyDeletean enjoyable read full of interlect, really liked the final stanza.
ReplyDeleteFascinating!
ReplyDeleteWords of beauty, I see so clearly through your words. A lovely piece indeed!
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