Sunday, May 15, 2016

feeling alone


feeling alone 
in the woods around Edo
just the autumn wind 
                   ©Yozakura (1640-1716)

up on my thoughts
through the serpent bridge
                   © Humbird



*A Tan Renga looks similar with the tanka, but there is a difference. A tanka is written by one poet and a Tan Renga is written by two poets, it's a short chained renga of two stanzas.

Read more at: CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI, Tan Renga Challenge 

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19 comments:

  1. Nice, "up on my thoughts." The whole capping verse has a jazzy vibe to it. I like it.

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  2. Lonely places can be found anywhere.

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  3. This is an interesting form, linking two poets. Very cool.

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  4. Love this up on my thoughts too...

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  5. I concur...what a wonderful form...

    Donna@LivingFromHappiness

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  6. Thoughts can spur one on and bring a new dawn

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  7. I love that line so much "up on my thoughts" leaves the reader with so many images.

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  8. I like how you wrote your poem - launching it off of the other one in such a meaningful way.

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  9. I like your interpretation interesting form you are using here to express your thoughts.

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  10. What a lovely idea, to make a renga from the haiku of a past haiku writer.

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  11. The serpent bridge sounds like a harsh place to be when feeling lonely..i hope the wind sweeps you to a brighter place xo

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  12. Compelling, letting the wind swell by giving it a bridge.

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  13. Interesting form. I like your description of the wind in your thoughts.

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  14. A nice completion. Still thinking on it:)

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  15. nice renku link, i sense that chilly wind though we are in cyber space

    much love...

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  16. Thank you, friends for inspirational comments!

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