Saturday, February 27, 2016

Irregular ode

~ Image courtesy of Georgia/Bastet ~



When sun is perching on horizon
and colors carousel my eyes
the day is setting, or it’s rising…
how’d you advise?

Sky darkens…some hues maybe leaving
acute night vision ever faint…
when minor mood change so evident
would you pretend?


Read more at: B&P's Shadorma & Beyond: Irregular Od

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23 comments:

  1. I love the sound of the first stanza....it's so lyrical and smooth.

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  2. Would pretend and have a little fun

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  3. This poem made me ponder and smile :)
    Beautifully put.


    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  4. Interesting question. But one can't pretend for a long stretch of time...and in the long run it probably is not worth it to do so.

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  5. I love watching the sky at sunrise and sunset......the changing hues.....

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  6. I wonder so... could you really pretend... I think it would leave a thorn in your smile...

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  7. I like this. No need to pretend.

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  8. Love the suggestion of in-between(es) of the first stanza, the not knowing exactly what is what.

    And I'm with Mary when it comes to the concluding question. It might be done for a bit (and around those who don't know us well), but after a while... pretension is often discovered.

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  9. No. Let it go with the night and enjoy how the colors fade.

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  10. colors carousel my eyes - I like that image sort of like riding one those painted ponies into the sunset or sunrise..I enjoy both so no need to pretend...

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  11. Sometimes it's hard to tell which way change is taking us. This is a lovely reflection.
    Steve K.

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  12. both sunrise and sunset have their own beautiful songs to be heard..good to accept both...and pretension takes us nowhere...a lovely and thought provoking poem...

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  13. Love your use of 'carousel' as a verb, and the particular phrase. Delightful ode altogether.

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  14. I am happy to both welcome the night and the dawn too.

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  15. definitely how’d you advise

    I too get confused!

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  16. Not knowing if day is setting or rising...maybe it's as much how we feel as what the sun tells us

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  17. Thoughtful and intriguing ... perception and choice - a very interesting little piece.

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  18. Very colourful thoughts in description, sunset or sunrise both hold the beauty of creation..

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  19. how’d you advise? :)
    Excellent!
    ZQ

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  20. Nicely done, I really enjoyed your irregular ode ... and thanks for linking up this week! Bastet

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