Wednesday, March 18, 2015

Turbulent mind

 The Scream by Edward Munch
The Scream by Edvard Munch

Prominence annoyed…
He speaks in stern voice
To rotate an affection
     To hide into penumbra
    To burst in love flares later

                   &

Hushed, turbulent pain
Transmits in radiant zone
'Love lights the whole sky'…*

* The last line - from poetry of 14 century by Hafiz

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30 comments:

  1. The last line really shines humbird...love is both painful and bright xo

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    1. Hi, Jae. The last line - by Hafiz, 14 century poet, last quote by Susan. I will show it, thanks!

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  2. love lights the sky that is a lovely line

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    1. Love the thought too! Thank you! x

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  3. Wow, all this fire! Too bad it's for disgruntled love. In the first loss of prominence brings on a stern dominance. In the second pain causes the flare up--painful love. I hope that there is a gentler fire than the one promised by James Baldwin in "Fire Next Time." Fine pieces.

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  4. I love Hafiz's quote about the sky, and you have used his line wonderfully here. I like "transmits in radiant zone".

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  5. "Love lights the whole sky!" I adore that line, it feels like how a child sees the world, completely and without question! It's fact!

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  6. Love lights the sky is a great line. The sun might get jealous though

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  7. Gorgeous well chosen form for your poetry as well as amazing creativity with integrating both poems into one :)

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  8. Only for those in love does the light fill the whole sky. Love is hope and slowly it is becoming less important in our hedonistic world.

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  9. Love is light and burning as well...the haiku is beautifully integrated with the lines above...

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  10. Aah...the imagery in this romantic poem is enhanced by your poetic verses. Superlike😊

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  11. Great incorporation of all the different prompts, and thanks for introducing me to "penumbra" as I was not familiar with that term before. And, I just LOVE Hafiz so always love to see a nod to him :-)

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  12. Lighting the sky with love....oh well....maybe somewhere !

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  13. Delightful - and thanks for a new word!

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  14. nice when pain swaps places with love and the sky is radiant and shiny again

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  15. I love that ending, love lights the whole sky ~

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  16. definitely agree, the last line summarizes everything about love, even the painful ones. a positive feeling can still be taken from it

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  17. Nice to incorporate a line from a known poet! It gives one a strength of finesse and respectability! Great lines humbird!

    Hank

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  18. I like the thought of love lighting the whole sky..hoping it would radiate to some hearts below on earth.

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  19. That love seems quite dangerous to me. I loved this bit:
    "To hide into penumbra
    To burst in love flares later"
    Wonderful.
    -HA

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  20. A very strong view of the love the sun gives.

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  21. Sometimes we do hide in the shadows of love, but it's still there and like the sun, it will shine. Lovely poem. Like the other commentors I love the last lines.

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  22. This is intriguing and I love your use of penumbra...great write. :)

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  23. Vivid and tormented!

    mindlovemisery

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  24. Beautiful....a very innovative piece, humbird :)

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