Friday, March 6, 2015

Beyond 10 words

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So quiet.
   Engine
      lulled before
         stopped.
            Dead flies.
              Iron Gate.


          * * *

Pale twilight. Ruined castle.
The selfish Giant
Garden is here.
         

         * * *

Dustfinger whispered.
Greedy to books
Poor church mouse
Aunt Elinor.

 Reading “Inkheart” by Cornelia Funke  ~ Ch.4 A House full of books.
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14 comments:

  1. Pat HattMarch 6, 2015 at 8:30 PM

    Quiet until the giant goes a fe fi fo fum

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  2. Brian MillerMarch 6, 2015 at 8:41 PM

    that first one is pretty cool...the minimalism gives us just a hint
    of what is happening but i can fill in the rest...

    i read inkheart...smiles.

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  3. Rosemary Nissen-WadeMarch 6, 2015 at 9:16 PM

    I haven't read Inkheart. Now I hardly need to, you ccnvey so much in your few words!

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  4. AnonymousMarch 6, 2015 at 9:38 PM

    I like these - just enough to let the mind fill in the details. I'm off to reserve Inkheart from the library

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  5. brudbergMarch 7, 2015 at 1:06 AM

    Wonderful concentration.. Many senses activated and I like what I can fill between. If I had read the book it would have been all different.

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  6. AnonymousMarch 7, 2015 at 4:38 AM

    I like all of them, but the first is my favourite. IT says so much with so few words!

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  7. ClaudiaMarch 7, 2015 at 4:53 AM

    my fav is the one with the castle and the selfish giant - sounds like there's a story behind...

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  8. Vandana SharmaMarch 7, 2015 at 6:43 AM

    so many characters around this castles beautifully blended.

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  9. GraceMarch 7, 2015 at 7:02 AM

    I admire the short verses, and I think a bigger stories are coming, smiles ~

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  10. Anita SabatMarch 7, 2015 at 8:15 AM

    I created 3 stories in my head.
    The 2nd one was familiar as I have read the Selfish Giant story in which he blocks children from his garden & the garden loses its life. It revives after he allows kids!

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  11. TruedessaMarch 7, 2015 at 9:03 AM

    I really enjoyed the first verse and the pic is haunting..takes me somewhere quick.

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  12. Lux G.March 7, 2015 at 10:26 AM

    Oh, oh. I love short stories too. :)

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  13. SilverGardeniaMarch 7, 2015 at 2:09 PM

    The picture fits your poem so well. Very nice.

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  14. Anthony DuceMarch 7, 2015 at 3:09 PM

    And the story and the mood emerge, with these well placed words.

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