Saturday, December 12, 2015

Circular poem


The patterns go
flow – vertical, horizontal
tall and short, throughout
out I go when tired
red makes me believe
leaves have second life
strive I drink pure water
tore the pages of past
at last I can write much more
bored? not – always at new
venue to discover what tickle
call from empowered fates
fades the patterns’ go…


26 comments:

  1. Always something new indeed, as round and round life goes

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    1. New if we go behind the circle....thanks, Pat!

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  2. Like looking at clouds there are always new things to find if you take the time to observe.

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  3. Watching the patterns flow.......an ever-changing landscape to delight in....

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  4. I love the flow of this poem...and I love watching the flow of nature!

    Donna@LivingFromHappiness

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  5. There is such a variety of patterns....well expressed.

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    1. Yeah, many of the patterns, but are they all ours?....thank you, Mary!

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  6. Interesting form..never tried it before!

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    1. really productive technique, worth to give it a try!

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  7. The use of the final syllable in each line to closely rhyme in the first or second in the next was quite captivating.

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  8. sometimes it's absolutely necessary to tear the pages of the past and be "always at new / venue to discover" life's flowing pattern...

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    1. Just did it couple days ago, but still not done....much more left... Thank you!

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  9. Bravo! Well done indeed Humbird .. I really happy you gave the form a whirl! Bastet

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  10. It is good to break free from the circle and find new things and thoughts to prevent us from being bored - i can always count on you for something new and shiny humbird ;)

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    1. haha....ths...and I count on you, my dear friend...sorry, sometimes I move slowly and chaotically :) best! oxox

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  11. What an intriguing form. I must try it, one of these days. A wonderful stream of consciousness cascade, beautifully pinned against that perfect first line.

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