The patterns go
flow – vertical, horizontal
tall and short, throughout
out I go when tired
red makes me believe
leaves have second life
strive I drink pure water
tore the pages of past
at last I can write much more
bored? not – always at new
venue to discover what tickle
call from empowered fates
fades the patterns’ go…
Always something new indeed, as round and round life goes
ReplyDeleteNew if we go behind the circle....thanks, Pat!
Deletenicely put liked it
ReplyDeletethanks , Cifar. Nice to see you.
DeleteLike looking at clouds there are always new things to find if you take the time to observe.
ReplyDeleteYep, time - crucial detail very often...
DeleteWatching the patterns flow.......an ever-changing landscape to delight in....
ReplyDeletefor sure! Thank you, Sherry!
DeleteI love the flow of this poem...and I love watching the flow of nature!
ReplyDeleteDonna@LivingFromHappiness
Nice...thank you
DeleteThere is such a variety of patterns....well expressed.
ReplyDeleteYeah, many of the patterns, but are they all ours?....thank you, Mary!
DeleteInteresting form..never tried it before!
ReplyDeletereally productive technique, worth to give it a try!
DeleteThe use of the final syllable in each line to closely rhyme in the first or second in the next was quite captivating.
ReplyDeleteAnd I'm sure you'd do a fine job with the form. Bastet
DeleteGlad you like it!
Deletesometimes it's absolutely necessary to tear the pages of the past and be "always at new / venue to discover" life's flowing pattern...
ReplyDeleteJust did it couple days ago, but still not done....much more left... Thank you!
DeleteBravo! Well done indeed Humbird .. I really happy you gave the form a whirl! Bastet
ReplyDeleteThank...it was a good idea, creative one...
DeleteIt is good to break free from the circle and find new things and thoughts to prevent us from being bored - i can always count on you for something new and shiny humbird ;)
ReplyDeletehaha....ths...and I count on you, my dear friend...sorry, sometimes I move slowly and chaotically :) best! oxox
DeleteBrilliant write :D :D
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sanaa!
DeleteWhat an intriguing form. I must try it, one of these days. A wonderful stream of consciousness cascade, beautifully pinned against that perfect first line.
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