Tuesday, October 13, 2015

Edges

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You said: we must cut
the sharp edges
to smooth the life of
the risk and trial
(in your near-sight-
edness)…

Instead we got double
efforts, and querying:
how to overcome
underwater rocks
and craters, escape
the pokes of
wicked spindle…

you said: now,
in no time,
we can afford
the lethargic sleep
for (another?) 100 years…
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16 comments:

  1. 21 WitsOctober 13, 2015 at 3:47 PM

    Ah yes, sleep does us good, smoothing out life's wrinkles! Bravo.

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  2. Pat HattOctober 13, 2015 at 5:52 PM

    Have to watch those craters, can't fall in. But sleep is nice

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  3. Anthony DuceOctober 14, 2015 at 10:38 AM

    Sometimes the “you(s)” don’t have the answers…
    Enjoyed..

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  4. brudbergOctober 15, 2015 at 3:47 PM

    Afford.. there is no we in that sleep... it's the grand-children's sleep, and it will be too late I think

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  5. ScarletOctober 15, 2015 at 4:35 PM

    Maybe time to get into that long and deep sleep, without the pokes of the wicked spindle ~

    Grace

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  6. UnknownOctober 15, 2015 at 7:06 PM

    Oh, indeed... That first stanza says it all! Wonderful.

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  7. tonispencerOctober 15, 2015 at 7:51 PM

    I like this spin on that dark tale of revenge and redemption...no prince to awaken us with a kiss

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  8. MaryOctober 15, 2015 at 8:06 PM

    The lethargic sleep of 100 years...way too long! Smiles.

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  9. AnonymousOctober 15, 2015 at 8:38 PM

    Intriguing poem...

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  10. UnknownOctober 16, 2015 at 10:54 AM

    I hope my comment gets published!
    To sleep and lose the bruises and bumps... Splendid!

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  11. Katie Mia FrederickOctober 16, 2015 at 1:44 PM

    Ah.. humans.. spending
    Life focusing on imperfections
    polishing them down.. a response..
    Fear of Change..
    Detail thinking..
    Devil of same..
    Oxytocin Receptors
    on feet connecTinG to
    Earth's sAnd.. Love
    it ALL..
    meanwhile.. most..
    wear shoes..
    trim lawns
    carefully squAre..
    sidewalk edges..
    Earth
    screams!
    Can't YOU
    see ME..
    beyond your
    sidewalk eYes..:)

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  12. kaykualaOctober 16, 2015 at 6:05 PM

    in no time,
    we can afford
    the lethargic sleep

    Most would not have the urgency! Good observation humbird!

    Hank

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  13. Mon.EspritOctober 17, 2015 at 12:46 AM

    I like the continuity and eternity that we can probably never earn that sleep or rest. A cool write.

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  14. AnonymousOctober 17, 2015 at 5:03 AM

    Sleep - as escape? Reading Rip van Winkle.

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  15. Marina SofiaOctober 17, 2015 at 11:50 AM

    Sounds to me like something went wrong, our efforts wasted and so we all just sink back into lethargy and feel we needn't worry about things for another century or so... although we should act now.
    Am I completely off-track with my interpretation?

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    1. humbirdOctober 19, 2015 at 3:56 PM

      I believe no efforts can be wasted...we learned the lesson....and everything is on time ...even if it required some nap...smiles ~ Thank you!

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