Pack brains in trains
torture not the flesh
worn liquor uniform
lust lasts under
hypnosis
hypnotizing gimmicks
slash-smash
with lotion,
tease low emotion of
body machine
truth seen by discerning eye.
truth seen by discerning eye.
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I smiled at the idea that lust lasts under hypnosis. Perhaps this should inspire a scientific study.
ReplyDeleteENjoyed. The last sentence says it all..
ReplyDeletesometimes we have to see things not meant to be seen!!!
ReplyDeleteDig deeper and the eye shall see
ReplyDeleteNice assemblage of those tricky words!
ReplyDeleteNice, the way you used the words!
ReplyDeleteliquor, lust...they all can be distractions
ReplyDeletea discerning eye can see through....
You must certainly pull past the layers to find the truth these days...and I think you just did!
ReplyDeleteInteresting poem, with its sharp images. Love the lust line, that just perfect. Thanks for posting that music video, will check out later.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good song too It;s Mystical Sun Cloudbursting http://youtu.be/wQRtEPHsvE0
http://thequietone.net/2014/10/11/phantom-train/
Having been smashed by liquor I don't that discernability 'hic" was one of my strong points.
ReplyDeleteI agree an interesting poem with stark images. Your opening line grabs the reader immmediately. Nice job.
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*that should read: grabs the reader's attention immediately.
Delete"truth seen by discerning eye" lovely ending to a lovely poem...nicely done.
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I enjoyed your write!
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