Sunday, October 19, 2014

Mapping

Mag_242 ~ courtesy of Tess Kincaid


We steel to shine
as diamonds? – crazy
martyrs of self-dreams
we seer our victories
in argument for sake of it…

Such prisoners of childhood
at twilight
play secrets with a shadow,
pretending we can’t hear
a stranger/soul’s
laughter…


Sunday Whirl

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22 comments:

  1. brudbergOctober 19, 2014 at 1:00 PM

    So well used those words.. and it works so well with the picture too.

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  2. KayOctober 19, 2014 at 1:39 PM

    love the 'line play secrets with shadow'....xx

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  3. MaryOctober 19, 2014 at 1:48 PM

    I think it is beautiful when we take times to listen for a stranger's laughter!

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  4. Kathe W.October 19, 2014 at 3:25 PM

    lovely poem- I am enjoying what we all are writing this week!

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  5. ZQOctober 19, 2014 at 3:26 PM

    Good work! Well done!
    ZQ

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  6. GraceOctober 19, 2014 at 4:26 PM

    I specially like play secrets with shadow ~ Good work on the weaving of words ~

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  7. Pat HattOctober 19, 2014 at 5:31 PM

    A strangers laughter just means you are having fun and doing something right, hopefully

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  8. flaubertOctober 19, 2014 at 9:29 PM

    Excellent use of the words, humbird. I love laughter.

    Pamela

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  9. Sumana RoyOctober 19, 2014 at 9:53 PM

    i like this contempt for "martyrs of self-dreams" and they are truly ".... prisoners of childhood / at twilight"...use of words is amazing here...

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  10. Brian MillerOctober 19, 2014 at 10:45 PM

    some really great lines in this...the martyrs of self dreams...
    that whole second stanza is rather enrapturing...

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  11. Silent Otto October 20, 2014 at 5:58 AM

    The enemy always attacks at dusk - Sun Tzu

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  12. annell4October 20, 2014 at 10:06 AM

    Secrets and shadows, nice write!

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  13. Jae RoseOctober 20, 2014 at 12:15 PM

    Stolen shine is never as pure as a diamond sparkle..the picture really illuminates the bigger story behind this piece

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  14. AnonymousOctober 20, 2014 at 2:49 PM

    Strong work, Humbird!

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  15. Ginny BrannanOctober 20, 2014 at 4:37 PM

    " …at twilight,
    play secrets with a shadow," really like the imagery with that line. Reminds me of my own childhood, playing till dusk, till our parents called us in. Well written, great combination of imagery and words.

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  16. Gen Giggles October 21, 2014 at 6:19 AM

    Great use of the prompt. I like "playing secrets with a shadow"

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  17. HelenOctober 21, 2014 at 8:26 AM

    Very nice ~~

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  18. AnonymousOctober 21, 2014 at 1:04 PM

    beautiful!!

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  19. CathyOctober 21, 2014 at 2:29 PM

    Interesting because maybe the strangers laughter isn't that innocent

    http://thequietone.net/2014/10/19/crazy-diamond/

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    1. humbirdOctober 21, 2014 at 3:30 PM

      Good idea. Cool words, Cathy, thank you! :)x

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  20. Tess KincaidOctober 23, 2014 at 1:13 PM

    We're all prisoners of our childhood...excellent...

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