Wednesday, March 18, 2015

Turbulent mind

The Scream by Edward Munch
The Scream by Edvard Munch

Prominence annoyed…
He speaks in stern voice
To rotate an affection
     To hide into penumbra
    To burst in love flares later

                   &

Hushed, turbulent pain
Transmits in radiant zone
'Love lights the whole sky'…*

* The last line - from poetry of 14 century by Hafiz

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30 comments:

  1. Jae RoseMarch 18, 2015 at 1:07 PM

    The last line really shines humbird...love is both painful and bright xo

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    1. humbirdMarch 18, 2015 at 1:17 PM

      Hi, Jae. The last line - by Hafiz, 14 century poet, last quote by Susan. I will show it, thanks!

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  2. Sheilagh LeeMarch 18, 2015 at 2:03 PM

    love lights the sky that is a lovely line

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  3. SusanMarch 18, 2015 at 3:31 PM

    Wow, all this fire! Too bad it's for disgruntled love. In the first loss of prominence brings on a stern dominance. In the second pain causes the flare up--painful love. I hope that there is a gentler fire than the one promised by James Baldwin in "Fire Next Time." Fine pieces.

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  4. Sanaa RizviMarch 18, 2015 at 3:45 PM

    What a fine piece of work!
    xoxo

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  5. Sherry Blue SkyMarch 18, 2015 at 5:27 PM

    I love Hafiz's quote about the sky, and you have used his line wonderfully here. I like "transmits in radiant zone".

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  6. 21 WitsMarch 18, 2015 at 6:00 PM

    "Love lights the whole sky!" I adore that line, it feels like how a child sees the world, completely and without question! It's fact!

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  7. Pat HattMarch 18, 2015 at 6:25 PM

    Love lights the sky is a great line. The sun might get jealous though

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  8. UnknownMarch 18, 2015 at 7:09 PM

    Gorgeous well chosen form for your poetry as well as amazing creativity with integrating both poems into one :)

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  9. Old EggMarch 18, 2015 at 7:55 PM

    Only for those in love does the light fill the whole sky. Love is hope and slowly it is becoming less important in our hedonistic world.

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  10. Sumana RoyMarch 18, 2015 at 11:24 PM

    Love is light and burning as well...the haiku is beautifully integrated with the lines above...

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  11. PanchaliMarch 19, 2015 at 12:33 AM

    Aah...the imagery in this romantic poem is enhanced by your poetic verses. Superlike😊

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  12. C.C.March 19, 2015 at 4:06 AM

    Great incorporation of all the different prompts, and thanks for introducing me to "penumbra" as I was not familiar with that term before. And, I just LOVE Hafiz so always love to see a nod to him :-)

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  13. rallentandaMarch 19, 2015 at 5:44 AM

    Lighting the sky with love....oh well....maybe somewhere !

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  14. Keith's RamblingsMarch 19, 2015 at 10:16 AM

    Delightful - and thanks for a new word!

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  15. ClaudiaMarch 19, 2015 at 1:37 PM

    nice when pain swaps places with love and the sky is radiant and shiny again

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  16. ScarletMarch 19, 2015 at 4:17 PM

    I love that ending, love lights the whole sky ~

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  17. totomaiMarch 19, 2015 at 5:04 PM

    definitely agree, the last line summarizes everything about love, even the painful ones. a positive feeling can still be taken from it

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  18. kaykualaMarch 19, 2015 at 6:50 PM

    Nice to incorporate a line from a known poet! It gives one a strength of finesse and respectability! Great lines humbird!

    Hank

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  19. TruedessaMarch 19, 2015 at 10:41 PM

    I like the thought of love lighting the whole sky..hoping it would radiate to some hearts below on earth.

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  20. AnonymousMarch 20, 2015 at 2:48 AM

    That love seems quite dangerous to me. I loved this bit:
    "To hide into penumbra
    To burst in love flares later"
    Wonderful.
    -HA

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  21. Gen Giggles March 20, 2015 at 7:20 AM

    A very strong view of the love the sun gives.

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  22. Myrna R.March 21, 2015 at 11:05 AM

    Sometimes we do hide in the shadows of love, but it's still there and like the sun, it will shine. Lovely poem. Like the other commentors I love the last lines.

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  23. HannahMarch 21, 2015 at 11:12 AM

    This is intriguing and I love your use of penumbra...great write. :)

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  24. AmberMarch 22, 2015 at 7:40 AM

    Vivid and tormented!

    mindlovemisery

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  25. MeenalSonalMarch 23, 2015 at 4:51 AM

    Love is always special...Nice poetry !!!

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  26. PanchaliMarch 24, 2015 at 2:17 PM

    Beautiful....a very innovative piece, humbird :)

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