“This slow
turning of eyes
now
able to see…”
E. Montale
Two balls, flashing in darkness,
observing, absorbed, adapting
to see the contours of bodies
and edges swaying away,
blurry becomes the beginning
of studying…
So there we are tracing
each other dreams, convexity
compliments concavity,
and between – insulation-
whole possibilities, where
No swaps with Yes
yin & yang principles…
Transparent soul, jester
playing with two eye balls
in his hands
of eternity,
standup
comedian-
the one, we
afraid of, - a clown
why? ’cause
reminds our
hidden longing…
convexity
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and between – isolation-
whole possibilities
is a really cool and twisty run....like that part much...
and interesting thought too on the hidden longings being the reason
for the fear of clowns...
it's really twisty...I've changed to insulation....meaning the extraction and contraction and insulation between with strong fear....new thought...
ReplyDeleteYes lots of twists and contrasts here. The jester with the eye balls did bring me to a stop and made me read again more carefully!
ReplyDeleteThere is something sinister about the two people in a yin and yang situation ~ These lines struck me most:
ReplyDeleteTransparent soul, jester
playing with two eye balls
in his hands of eternity,
standup comedian-
Have a good week humbird ~
Loving the words you've chosen here and the energy it gives this piece.
ReplyDeleteThat last stanza does have a sinister tone to it. To me there is something frightening about clowns.
ReplyDeleteClowns aren't that scary, but I don't have any hidden longing to be one lol
ReplyDeleteHands of eternity... I love that!
ReplyDeleteTheir are 2 balls flashing in darkness to begin and a2 eyeballs to end, i found this maze a bit frightening, even with the laughter of clowns
ReplyDeleteHave a nice Wednesday humbug, thank you for dropping in at my blog
Much love...
Concave and convex dreams and compliments. Love the metaphor! Never seen it used that way before! Great lines humbird!
ReplyDeleteHank
i often think that clowns have a certain space to act in ways we wouldn't and in that make us see what we didn't dare see before
ReplyDeleteLove the concave and contours of the whole scene and emotion...However, I closed my eyes, as I do not like clowns either!!!! I imagined the scene thereafter:)
ReplyDeleteEileen
The presence of the sinister clown added a disturbing atmosphere to your poem even though I was ready to admire the jester's act with the balls.
ReplyDeleteI liked the words, the twists and the contrasts here. Nice work :)
ReplyDelete'God is a comedian playing to an audience that is too afraid to laugh.' ~ Voltaire
ReplyDeleteI was pondering on the quote while writing the poem. ~ Thanks for all comments! Love x
Interesting concept Humbird..bring in the clowns..why do they make us feel vulnerable?
ReplyDeleteTwisty use of words! A different take on the prompt.. :)
ReplyDeleteLots of ways to view this piece I think--this reminds me of the theory that the universe is nothing but a hologram --nicely written
ReplyDeleteI would like to see an artist's rendition of this...
ReplyDeleteEach twist made me ponder, great lines :)
ReplyDeleteReminded me of the tarot and the imagery therein, especially when I got tot he Jester. A twisting path through your lines full of intriguing glimpses into half-hidden scenery.
ReplyDeleteLovely expression :)
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