feeling alone
in the woods around Edo
just the autumn wind
©Yozakura
(1640-1716)
up on my thoughts
through the serpent bridge
© Humbird
*A Tan Renga looks similar with the tanka, but there
is a difference. A tanka is written by one poet and a Tan Renga is written by
two poets, it's a short chained renga of two stanzas.
Shared with PU Poetry Pantry
Lonely places can be found anywhere.
ReplyDeleteThis is an interesting form, linking two poets. Very cool.
ReplyDeleteLove this up on my thoughts too...
ReplyDeleteI concur...what a wonderful form...
ReplyDeleteDonna@LivingFromHappiness
Thoughts can spur one on and bring a new dawn
ReplyDeleteI love that line so much "up on my thoughts" leaves the reader with so many images.
ReplyDeleteSuch a lovely write..!!
ReplyDeleteI like how you wrote your poem - launching it off of the other one in such a meaningful way.
ReplyDeleteI like your interpretation interesting form you are using here to express your thoughts.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely idea, to make a renga from the haiku of a past haiku writer.
ReplyDeleteThe serpent bridge sounds like a harsh place to be when feeling lonely..i hope the wind sweeps you to a brighter place xo
ReplyDeleteCompelling, letting the wind swell by giving it a bridge.
ReplyDeleteInteresting form. I like your description of the wind in your thoughts.
ReplyDeleteA nice completion. Still thinking on it:)
ReplyDeletenice renku link, i sense that chilly wind though we are in cyber space
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Thank you, friends for inspirational comments!
ReplyDeleteWonderful completed Humbird
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kristjaan!
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