feeling alone
in the woods around Edo
just the autumn wind
©Yozakura
(1640-1716)
up on my thoughts
through the serpent bridge
© Humbird
*A Tan Renga looks similar with the tanka, but there
is a difference. A tanka is written by one poet and a Tan Renga is written by
two poets, it's a short chained renga of two stanzas.
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Nice, "up on my thoughts." The whole capping verse has a jazzy vibe to it. I like it.
ReplyDeleteLonely places can be found anywhere.
ReplyDeleteThis is an interesting form, linking two poets. Very cool.
ReplyDeleteLove this up on my thoughts too...
ReplyDeleteI concur...what a wonderful form...
ReplyDeleteDonna@LivingFromHappiness
Thoughts can spur one on and bring a new dawn
ReplyDeleteI love that line so much "up on my thoughts" leaves the reader with so many images.
ReplyDeleteSuch a lovely write..!!
ReplyDeleteI like how you wrote your poem - launching it off of the other one in such a meaningful way.
ReplyDeleteI like your interpretation interesting form you are using here to express your thoughts.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely idea, to make a renga from the haiku of a past haiku writer.
ReplyDeleteThe serpent bridge sounds like a harsh place to be when feeling lonely..i hope the wind sweeps you to a brighter place xo
ReplyDeleteCompelling, letting the wind swell by giving it a bridge.
ReplyDeleteInteresting form. I like your description of the wind in your thoughts.
ReplyDeleteA nice completion. Still thinking on it:)
ReplyDeletenice renku link, i sense that chilly wind though we are in cyber space
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Thank you, friends for inspirational comments!
ReplyDeleteWonderful completed Humbird
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kristjaan!
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