Sunday, May 11, 2014

Close

Martin Stranka photos
'Close' ~ Martin Stranka

She rubs the shattering dreams
thru the glasses of clumsy clown
falling from shimmering sky
leaves no chance for salvation…

The sigh…longing soul insight…
as if swinging medieval axe
brings the power to travel
back into time…

Vanished smoothly…
to settle for less
on the land of indigenous people…
listen! someone calling your name…

                        Brenda Warren 

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54 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 11, 2014 at 11:08 AM

    This flowed so smoothly! Beautiful! (PS. possible typo in the first line shuttering)

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  2. PirateGunnMay 11, 2014 at 11:17 AM

    This verse sounded very nice indeed, really good use of words there

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    1. humbirdMay 11, 2014 at 11:25 AM

      Thank you very much! Lovely Day to you :)xx

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  3. Pat HattMay 11, 2014 at 11:39 AM

    Hopefully it doesn't take a big axe to travel back in time, that would hurt lol

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    1. humbirdMay 11, 2014 at 11:58 AM

      well... something we need 'cut' to move on...and our 'axe'/efforts might be big or small...

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  4. ClaudiaMay 11, 2014 at 1:08 PM

    it's tough when dreams shatter... but maybe there's a new dream just around the next bend...

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    1. humbirdMay 11, 2014 at 1:14 PM

      Hopefully, the dreams like a puzzle pieces can be rebuilt again in new combination...thanks :)

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  5. AnonymousMay 11, 2014 at 1:08 PM

    Lovely mix of present and past through your imagery.

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    1. humbirdMay 11, 2014 at 1:23 PM

      Thank you, Brenda! For the comment and inspirational words!

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  6. brudbergMay 11, 2014 at 1:51 PM

    A shattered dream is so much like falling.. I love how you mixed the prompts.. I reads so well

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  7. GabriellaMay 11, 2014 at 2:03 PM

    Shattered dreams are hard to experience. Yet, the closing line makes me think something new might be beginning.

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  8. Sherry Blue SkyMay 11, 2014 at 2:26 PM

    Some cool imagery in this poem - the shattered dreams, the shimmering sky.....

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  9. ZQMay 11, 2014 at 2:27 PM

    enjoyed the image and the accompanying piece.
    ZQ

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  10. Jae RoseMay 11, 2014 at 2:31 PM

    A time travelling Alice maybe? Although more like a warrior..I like that we don't quite know..makes her more likely to be amongst us now!

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    1. humbirdMay 12, 2014 at 11:31 AM

      Yeah, we don't quite know...have to trust our heart...what makes the ego run crazy....~ Thank you!

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  11. Laurie KolpMay 11, 2014 at 2:49 PM

    So vivid!

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  12. Belva Rae StaplesMay 11, 2014 at 4:19 PM

    This has a nice flow. I like the time travel angle.

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    1. humbirdMay 12, 2014 at 11:33 AM

      We grip for past very badly sometimes... Thanks!

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  13. UnknownMay 11, 2014 at 5:28 PM

    The prompt inspires a time travel theme. Nicely written

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    1. humbirdMay 12, 2014 at 11:34 AM

      Time travel - not anymore fiction...almost! Thank you!

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  14. ScottlBMay 11, 2014 at 5:43 PM

    Nice images in this, good write

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  15. Kathe W.May 11, 2014 at 6:43 PM

    love the last verse

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  16. Old EggMay 11, 2014 at 7:38 PM

    How much more cognizant we are now to treading on ancient land. I like to be alone in the wild and have it whispering to me.

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    1. humbirdMay 12, 2014 at 11:37 AM

      It's hard to be humble sometimes....we focus more on new desires and forget to appreciate what we have ~ Thanks, Oldegg!

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  17. Brian MillerMay 11, 2014 at 8:03 PM

    whew...there is an interesting intensity to this...the last bit grounds it for me but i like the grit in the first 2 stanzas....

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    1. humbirdMay 12, 2014 at 11:39 AM

      It feels like we are connected, when meet the reflection of ourselves, - or just feels like part of us, if it makes sense. Hugs.

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  18. Sumana RoyMay 11, 2014 at 10:05 PM

    love this smooth flow...it's beautifully done

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  19. MaryMay 12, 2014 at 5:50 AM

    Love that though there is a shattering of dreams, it ends on an optimistic note...with "someone calling your name."

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    1. humbirdMay 12, 2014 at 11:42 AM

      Yeah, the hope - we came here to serve others to enlighten our souls....~ Thank you, Mary!

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  20. ScarletMay 12, 2014 at 5:08 PM

    I like that power to travel back in time ~ Such an interesting response to the picture prompt ~ Take care & have a good week ~

    Grace

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  21. Silent Otto May 12, 2014 at 7:30 PM

    Ah a Magician- Fool lurking in background ...have you seen " the time travellers wife"?

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  22. humbirdMay 12, 2014 at 9:45 PM

    A photographer? Sure, now will check it. Thanks, K.

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  23. Magaly GuerreroMay 13, 2014 at 12:33 AM

    It made me think of women sent to the New World to serve some kind of punishment... The pain of being thrown into the air, into the control chaos created by another. I wonder if she'll ever hear anyone calling her name...

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    1. Magaly GuerreroMay 13, 2014 at 12:35 AM

      P.S. Thanks so much for sharing the photographer's into. I love his work!

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    2. humbirdMay 13, 2014 at 10:18 PM

      We all walk through dif challenges in life...running from people we find salvation in people again...~ Thanks!

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  24. kaykualaMay 13, 2014 at 3:28 AM

    It is a pity! It has to come to some sort of finality. But the pain lingers on! Wonderful write for the multiple prompts, humbird!

    Hank

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    1. humbirdMay 13, 2014 at 10:19 PM

      The pain also has a positive side - the pleasure..~ Thanks, Hank!

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  25. adhi dasMay 13, 2014 at 3:32 AM

    everything happened for good,happening for good, will happen for good..time calling you back at the same time giving hope!! amazing lines that ends with optimistic belief...smiles:)

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    1. humbirdMay 13, 2014 at 10:22 PM

      It's amazing how is everything happening in their own time...~ Thanks for joining my blog :)xx

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  26. 21 WitsMay 13, 2014 at 10:44 AM

    Shattered is a word that always sparks strong images, and as always, you layout a perfect vivid story, that uses the words you've been given and you transform a perfect magpie as well. Bravo.

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  27. Tess KincaidMay 14, 2014 at 1:02 PM

    I like the unexpected medieval axe...

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  28. TruedessaMay 14, 2014 at 8:34 PM

    nice flow and well done incorporating the two prompts..

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  29. humbirdMay 17, 2014 at 11:19 AM

    Thanks, Truedessa!

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